Sunday 26 June 2016

Writing Salon Week 9: Sex Transcript

This post is for the June 26-July 2 writing event of the 2016 AIF Writing Salon.

Write a sample playthrough of your sex scene. List the commands that a player will do and write the responses that will happen. Think about alternate commands that the player might try. Here is a sample transcript:

> kiss her
You kiss her.

> Lick breasts
You gently lick her nipple.

> Have sex
You have sex with her. You cuddle with her afterwards and go to sleep.

The End.

It shows different commands that you can try and the expected responses.

Writing sex scenes can be difficult. Surprisingly, writing sex scenes isn't taught in school, so most people don't have any practice with it. A good sex scene shouldn't just be a mechanical description of sex acts. Describe how it feels and the emotions involved. I am including numerous excerpts of some public domain sex scenes that you can pilfer and adapt for your own writing.

Fanny Hill
(female pov, heterosex)
John Cleland
I lay down then, and carrying my hands to that part of me in which the objects just seen had begun to raise a mutiny, that prevailed over the smart of them, my fingers now opened themselves an easy passage; but long I had not time to consider the wide difference there, between the maid and the now finished woman, before Charles waked, and turning towards me, kindly enquired how I had rested? and, scarce giving me time to answer, imprinted on my lips one of his burning rapture kisses, which darted a flame to my heart, that from thence radiated to every part of me; and presently, as if he had proudly meant revenge for the survey I had smuggled of all his naked beauties, he spurns off the bed clothes, and trussing up my shift as high as it would go, took his turn to feast his eyes on all the gifts nature had bestowed on my person; his busy hands, too, ranged intemperately over every part of me. The delicious austerity and hardness of my yet unripe budding breasts, the whiteness and firmness of my flesh, the freshness and regularity of my features, the harmony of my limbs, all seemed to confirm him in his satisfaction with his bargain; but when curious to explore the havock he had made in the centre of his over fierce attack, he not only directed his hands there, but with a pillow put under, placed me favourably for his wanton purpose of inspection. Then, who can express the fire his eyes glistened, his hands glowed with! whilst sighs of pleasure, and tender broken exclamations, were all the praises he could utter. By this time his machine, stiffly risen at me, gave me to see it in its highest state and bravery. He feels it himself, seems pleased at its condition, and, smiling loves and graces, seizes one of my hands, and carries it, with gentle compulsion, to this pride of nature, and its richest master piece.

I, struggling faintly, could not help feeling what I could not grasp, a column of the whitest ivory, beautifully streaked with blue veins, and carrying, fully un-capt, a head of the liveliest vermilion: no horn could be harder or stiffer; yet no velvet more smooth or delicious to the touch. Presently he guided my hand lower, to that part in which nature, and pleasure keep their stores in concert, so aptly fastened and hung on to the root of their first instrument and minister, that not improperly he might be styled their purse-bearer too: there he made me feel distinctly, through their soft cover, the contents, a pair of roundish balls, that seemed to play within, and elude all pressure, but the tenderest, from without.

But now this visit of my soft, warm hand, in those so sensible parts, had put every thing into such ungovernable fury, disdaining all further preluding, and taking advantage of my commodious posture, he made the storm fall where I scarce patiently expected, and where he was sure to lay it: presently, then, I felt the stiff intersection betwen the yielding, divided lips of the wound, now open for life; where the narrowness no longer put me to intolerable pain, and afforded my lover no more difficulty than what heightened his pleasure, in the strict embrace of that tender, warm sheath, round the instrument it was so delicately adjusted to, and which now cased home, so gorged me with pleasure, that it perfectly suffocated me and took away my breath; then the killing thrusts! the unnumbered kisses! every one of which was a joy inexpressible; and that joy lost in a crowd of yet greater blisses! But this was a disorder too violent in nature to last long: the vessels, so stirred and intensely heated, soon boiled over, and for that time put out the fire; meanwhile all this dalliance and disport had so far consumed the morning, that it became a kind of necessity to lay breakfast and dinner into one.


The Life and Amours of the Beautiful, Gay and Dashing Kate Percival: The Belle of the Delaware
(female pov, heterosex)
Kate Percival
He was not content with the unveiled charms of the lower portion of my body, but he must needs release my large and plump breasts—and these afforded him a new theme on which to expatiate. He did not moralize long, but unbuttoning his pantaloons he released his stiff lance and, bringing it to bear between my widely stretched thighs, I soon felt it forcing its way into my sensitive vagina. I raised my buttocks to meet his thrusts and experienced the most delicious sensation. His motions grew quicker and the end approached. I wiggled my bottom from side to side. I gave utterance to my rapture in words, sighs and exclamations of pleasure and received his whole discharge at the same moment that I myself emitted. When he had finished he leaned over and kissed my breasts and assisted me to rise. We heard steps approaching the room and I hastily retired to my chamber.


The Life and Amours of the Beautiful, Gay and Dashing Kate Percival: The Belle of the Delaware
(heterosex)
Kate Percival
When I approached the arbor I heard the rustling of a dress inside, and instead of opening the door I peeped through the keyhole. Great God! I saw a sight which sent the blood boiling through my veins. Herbert Clarence was reclining on his back on a divan which he had drawn into the middle of the floor. His pantaloons were slipped down to his heels, leaving the whole of the lower portion of his body uncovered. Straddling him, with one foot resting on the ground and with the other on the divan was the beautiful Amy. Her dress was open in front, leaving her splendid breasts entirely bare. Her petticoats were elevated above her navel and thrown behind her white belly, her voluptuous thighs, her magnificent limbs, and above all that masterpiece of nature, her lovely Mons Veneris entirely exposed to my gaze, for she stood directly facing me. His instrument had penetrated the luscious lips of her slit. While I was watching he gave one tremendous heave upwards with his buttocks and sent it into her body clear up to his testicles. She was evidently gorged with delight and enraptured, for her lovely face expressed the most intense enjoyment, and by the quivering of her eyelids I felt assured the crisis would soon come. They now commenced to move together, he directing his thrusts upwards while she worked her bottom in reply to his motions. While this delicious play was going on, I could distinctly see his staff entering in and out of her coral sheath, the lips of which embraced it so tightly that they seemed to be afraid it should escape from them. It was the most voluptuous sight I had ever seen. As the acme approached, Amy leaned over and kissed Herbert—their tongues sought each other's mouths and they imitated the sexual act. So intense was their feeling of pleasure that they actually bit each other. The working of his lance in her sensitive vagina caused a suction sound delightful to hear.


The Life and Amours of the Beautiful, Gay and Dashing Kate Percival: The Belle of the Delaware
(female pov, cunnilingus, heterosex)
Kate Percival
After a few moments repose he rose up, and leaning over me, seized one of my hands and felt my bubbies with his unoccupied hand. The contact renewed the fire in his body and his eyes reassumed their brilliance. When I felt his hand descend on my breast, I shivered and made a pretense of snatching it away, but it was in vain. He cautiously unhooked my dress; I no longer restrained him. My frock fell off my shoulders and my naked bust was entirely exposed to his view. He passed from one to the other of my ivory globes, as he called them, and molded them with his hands, playing with the nipples and applying his lips to them so that he almost sucked my life away. But he was not yet satisfied. He knelt down before me and, placing his head between my bubbies, began to play with my feet. I made but little resistance and he began to raise my petticoats. He touched my legs, he reached my knees, and at last his hand came in contact with my fleshy thighs. He rested here a moment and excited me by kisses. I trembled in his grasp like a leaf—my desires overcame me and I was completely in his power. He then became more bold and his agitated hand ascended the marble columns which would lead us to the center of love. At last he reached my bijou and ran his fingers in the down covering that mossy spot—he even forced one more bold than the rest between the lips, and gently rubbed my clitoris. It was too much for me, I opened my thighs to the widest capacity and absolutely cried with pleasure. He then raised his head from my palpitating bosom, and applied his lips where he had just put his hand. He kissed my Mons Veneris a thousand times, and inserted his tongue between the folding lips; he again sought out my clitoris and played with it at will. But this could not continue long. I was absolutely drunk with delirious joy.

"'Oh, what pleasure!' I cried, 'do what you will with me, my dear Herbert.'

"His only reply was to divest himself of his clothes; he then performed the same office for me, and we were both naked as we were born. He turned me round and round—he patted my buttocks and caressed my body all over. My hands too were not idle. I seized his magnificent instrument and gently rubbed it and tickled his purse. We were both almost crazy. He then reclined me on my back on the sofa and threw himself on the top of me. I eagerly opened my thighs to receive him and guided his fiery dart to the entrance of my 'con.' He entered the lips and met a little resistance, but was not to be conquered, for raising my buttocks I gave a sudden heave upwards, and his instrument was suddenly imbedded in the sheath destined by nature to receive it. Then commenced the delicious movements. The motion was delightful. I looked around me and saw our naked bodies reflected in the mirrors. I could see his instrument entering in and out of my coral sheath. At last the consummation came.

"'Oh, Herbert,' I cried—'I die! I die!-clos-er!—closer—clo—'

"Thus muttering, I closed my eyes. My eyelids trembled and with a convulsive movement I threw my legs around his loins and pressed him so tightly that I almost took away his breath. All was over, for I felt the essence of love rush into my thirsty womb, while I at the same moment poured down my share of Venus' libations. My hold relaxed and we both fell all our lengths on the couch.

"After remaining without motion a few minutes, he kissed me again, for he was not yet satisfied. He soon rekindled my desires.

"He rose from the couch, and raising me up, placed me on its edge and again commenced his labor of love. With one hand he raised one of my arms in the air in such a manner as to leave my bosom entirely at his discretion. He took one of the nipples in his mouth and pressed me to him with his other hand. My thighs were widely separated and he had no difficulty in entering my vagina. He slightly bent his knees and was soon buried in my grotto. How delicious was the sensation of his lovely engine rubbing against the sides of my vagina. I assisted him by every means in my power, and in a short time we were again inundated with our mutual emission.


The Romance of Lust
(male pov, heterosex)
Anonymous
"No, Charlie, it took some trouble to get it in, let it stop where it is so deliciously engulphed," and at once anticipating her natural desires, she began the most exquisite pressures upon me, which very shortly brought us both up to the point of demanding more active measures. However, I rather restrained her, and told her we must retard our movements to increase our pleasures, because mere quick repetitions would only exhaust her, without yielding the true extasies of enjoyment. I, therefore, taught her the pleasures of the slow movements, and I worked her up to spending point, without giving way myself. The dear little creature clung to me with the most close and endearing embraces, as if she should force a complete amalgamation of our two bodies, and died away in the sweetest bliss of contented desire, with such a heavenly expression of extasy on her face as made me devour it with kisses. I had great difficulty in restraining myself from precipitately following her example; her delicious movements at the moment of spending, and the close pressures on my prick, were so exciting that resisting them was quite a triumph of control. I succeeded, and lay quite quiet, embalmed in the delicious suction of those exquisite folds of her charming little cunt, which exercised the most delightful pressures as well as suction on my enraptured prick. I left it entirely to her to lie as we were as long as she pleased, or to again begin the dear delightful friction that should once more make us dash on passion's furious course, to end as usual in the ever delicious extasies of the final crisis.

This last bout had been a double one for my sister; she all but swooned away with the rapture my spending in unison with her produced. She declared it was a death of the most delicious extasy, which it was perfectly impossible to describe. She clung to me, kissing me in the most endearing manner, and telling me how happy I had at last made her by completing the insertion of my prick in her cunt. It was worth the suffering of twenty times as much agony to arrive at so exquisite a result as every fuck I now gave her conferred upon her. We adjourned to the flower garden, that we might be seen playing together, and not excite suspicion by our constant disappearance, now that we were only two together. Of course, Mary knew what we were at and probably guessed that I had completed the initiation of Eliza. She smiled, and gave me a significant pressure of the hand, when we met again in the school-room to resume our lessons. For two days more I enjoyed Eliza all to myself; at each new fuck she became more and more perfect in conferring as well as receiving pleasure.


The Romance of Lust
(male pov, cunnilingus)
Anonymous
"My dear Charles, do you see that little projection at the upper part of my quim, that is my clitoris, and is the site of the most exquisite sensation; you see it is rather hard, even now, but you will find as you titillate it with your tongue or suck it, that it will become harder and more projecting, so apply your lips there."

I did as my lovely mistress desired, and soon found it stiffen and stand up nearly an inch into my mouth.

The convulsive twitches of her buttocks, the pressure forward of her hand on my head, all proved the exquisite felicity my lovely friend was enjoying. I slipped my hand under my chin—the position was awkward, but I managed to thrust my thumb into her cunt. My forefinger was somewhat in the way—but finding it exactly opposite the rosy hole of her bottom, and all being very moist there, I pushed it forward and it easily entered. I could not move my hand very actively, but I continued to gently draw my finger and thumb a little back together, and then thrust forward again. It seemed to add immensely to the pleasure I was giving her; her whole body quivered with excessive excitement. My head was pressed so firmly against her cunt that I had difficulty in breathing, but I managed to keep up the action of tongue and fingers until I brought on the exquisite crisis—her buttocks rose, her hand pressed hard on my head and her two powerful and fleshy thighs closed on my cheeks on each side and fixed me as if in a vice, while she poured down into my mouth and all over my chin, neck, and hand a perfect rush of sperm, and then lay in convulsive movements of enjoyment, hardly knowing what she was doing. As she held me so fast in every way, I continued to lick up the delicious discharge, and continued at the same time to pass my tongue over her clitoris. This, by producing a new excitement, brought her senses round.


The Romance of Lust
(male pov, cunnilingus)
Anonymous
She did not resist, but let me do as I liked. Pushing myself down the bed, I applied my lips and tongue to her lovely cunt, all wet with our mutual discharge, which was so sweet to the taste that I first began licking between the lips, and the applied myself to her excited clitoris, and with my finger and thumb working as on the previous morning I threw her into an extasy of delight, until again she had a delicious discharge. Then creeping up, I thrust my prick into her well-moistened and velvety cunt—as you may imagine it was rampant as ever after my mouth contact with the exquisite quim I had been sucking.


The Romance of Lust
(male pov, fellatio)
Anonymous
So taking my prick in her soft hand, she gently moved it up and down; then, suddenly stopping, took it into her mouth, sucking as much as she could get in, and titillating the knob with her tongue, while one hand frigged at the root of my prick and the other gently handled my two crisped-up cods. She prolonged the pleasure by occasional pauses, and at last, on finding the electric-like sensations coming, she hastened her movement, and I poured a torrent of sperm into her mouth. She continued her delicious sucking until not a drop more was left for her to swallow. This was the first time she ever gamahuched me, but it was not the last by scores of times. Ever after we improved upon the model, and added other endearments. When not under her courses, we mutually gamahuched each other, and she was the first to repeat upon me, with the intensest gratification, the delicious introduction of a finger behind while gamahuching me. At present, when she had thus taken the edge off my carnal appetite, she lovingly embraced me, and left me to my lovely slumbers. Of course, the four days' grace, saving two more passing visits "to keep me cool," as she said, turned all to the advantage of my sisters, whom I fucked and frigged to their utmost gratification and delight.


The Romance of Lust
(male pov, receiving anal during heterosex)
Anonymous
So saying, he moistened his tool and spit in my bum-hole, and proceeded very gently to introduce his prick therein. I have described his cock as not very thick at the point, consequently the first part introduced itself very easily, but when the pillar pushed its way in, and began to stretch the parts, it produced a curious sickening feeling, very like as if I had received a kick on the bottom; so I was obliged to ask him to halt a little. He was too experienced in the art not to fully understand my feelings, and knew well it would go off in a minute or two, if I was left quiet. So pausing until I told him he might now try to get in further, he drew back a little and applying more spittle to the shaft, gently and firmly, and slowly guided his prick up to the hilt, or as far as his belly and my buttocks would allow. Again pausing a little, until feeling by the throbbing of my prick, which produced the same pressure on my bum-hole, that I was warming to the work, he began slow movements of thrusts in and out, which, together with the hot and voluptuous pressures and movements of my own little partner excited both by Mary's finger and my prick, began to fire my passions, and we soon grew very fierce in our movements. Nothing I could ever have imagined equalled the extraordinary and delicious ecstasy that the double action produced upon my erotic nerves. I gasped, I shuddered with the agony of intense pleasure, and at the moment when the grand and rapturous finale approached, I actually brayed exactly like a donkey, which, in after cooler moments, amused all of us. The action of pleasure had come upon all at once, and we sank in an inert mass on those below us. How poor Mary endured it astonished us, but the scene had so excited her that she said it never occurred to her, and she felt nothing.

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  1. Sorry for the delay. My scene has an intricate voyeur seduction as a key part, and it took longer to write than I thought. That's what I get for not following my own advice about starting games in the middle of the action and skipping the stuff that happens before.

    Here is the voyeur section. I will post the main sex scene itself when I finish that. I will see if I can copy some of the text from the public domain text above.

    > x peephole
    Udele is discussing with Mr. Harrow about his ventures.

    "Your coal mine will have over a hundred workers!" Udele exclaims.

    "Yes. Many families and their children will find gainful employment there."

    "How generous of you. You are truly a great man." Udele smiles with a sense of awe as she stares in Mr. Harrow's eyes and gently runs her hand through his hair. Mr. Harrow smiles back in appreciation.

    > x peephole
    Udele is discussing with Mr. Harrow about his ventures.

    "What will the coal be used for?" Udele asks.

    "The mine is near a railway, so it can be easily transported throughout the empire. It can be used for heating or even for powering trains and steamships."

    "Steamships? How very modern and romantic." Udele stares at Mr. Harrow with a sense of wonderment on her face.

    "Coal is a true workhorse. No longer will we be subject to the whims of Nature. We can travel the oceans without wind using steam engines."

    "You are so clever, Mr. Harrow. I could never hope to understand coal like you do." Udele laughs flirtatiously as she rests her hand on Mr. Harrow's chest. Mr. Harrow puffs out his chest with pride.

    > x peephole
    Udele picks up a bottle from the corner of her room.

    "Mr. Harrow, let us have a sip of laudanum before I show you my art," Udele says.

    She pours two portions, and they both drink it down.

    > x peephole
    Udele grabs some art from her walls and brings them to her bed. She jumps on the bed herself and lays down seductively. Her dress rides up until her pale bare legs are exposed.

    She pats the an empty spot on the bed beside her. "Come, Mr. Harrow. Sit here with me to look at these sketches."

    Mr. Harrow looks over her beautiful body laying enticingly in front of him and cannot refuse the invitation. He sits down beside her.

    > x peephole
    Udele is showing Mr. Harrow some nude sketches of her made by different visiting artists.

    "This one was the most fun. I loved having flowers in my hair," Udele says.

    Mr. Harrow gazes longingly at the naked sketch.

    Udele continues. "I think lying on the bearskin was very unusual. It was so soft and warm yet so fierce and wild at the same time."

    > x peephole
    Udele is showing Mr. Harrow some nude sketches of her made by different visiting artists.

    "This sketch was so strange. I was wearing a chemise but the artist drew it as if the chemise were see-through," Udele says. "He said that I looked like a Roman goddess that way. Do you think I am that beautiful?"

    "Very much so."

    She laughs in pleased amusement. "I am wearing the chemise. Let me show you." She turns away from him. She unclasps her bodice and slides it from her shoulders. She adjusts her corset until her breasts spill fully over into her chemise. She turns back to face him. "Is this not a proper chemise?"

    In fact, the chemise hides very little with her nipples straining against the thin fabric. Mr. Harrow merely nods.

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    1. > x peephole
      Udele is showing Mr. Harrow some nude sketches of her made by different visiting artists.

      "This sketch is so funny. I had to lie down with my legs open and bent in weird ways. It was very uncomfortable," Udele says.

      Mr. Harrow is stunned by the provocative pose.

      "I don't think the sketch looks like me at all. Lord Kettering says that I sometimes look that way. What do you think?"

      Mr. Harrow looks back and forth between the sketch and Udele, trying to imagine her without clothes and posed the same way. "It's hard to say."

      "You cannot tell with my skirt covering my legs." She draws her skirt up until it just barely covers her V. She then splays open her legs like in the sketch, revealing everything to Mr. Harrow. "Does it look the same now?"

      Mr. Harrow stares at her dumbfounded for several moments before coming to his senses and looking away. "It looks very similar."

      > x peephole
      Udele is showing Mr. Harrow some nude sketches of her made by different visiting artists.

      She leans in close to him with her breasts pressed against his shoulder. "Lord Kettering says that some men would find the sketches more beautiful than me! Can you believe that?" She positions her face near his, ready for a kiss. She whispers to him, "Would you prefer the sketches or would you prefer me?"

      "I would prefer you," Mr. Harrow says. He does nothing else though, obviously confused.

      Undaunted, Udele continues her flirtation. She warmly hugs him. "You speak like a true gentleman. Lord Kettering can be quite mean sometimes."

      > x peephole
      Udele is sitting on her bed with Mr. Harrow.

      "I feel such a strong bond with you, Mr. Harrow. We've known each other for only a short time, but I feel so close to you in so many ways. What is your Zodiac sign?" Udele says.

      "I am a Leo."

      "That explains it. I am a Sagittarius. My fortune teller always tells me that Leo and Sagittarius are well-suited for each other." Udele gently strokes Mr. Harrow's arm.

      "Really?"

      "Yes, we are both passionate and adventurous people. My fortune teller told me that Leo and Sagittarius make for great lovers. You have such fire in your heart while I am so generous and energetic in my charms. The match would be one filled with desire." Udele slowly grinds her hips against the bed as she speaks.

      Mr. Harrow is completely captivated.

      > x peephole
      Udele is sitting on her bed with Mr. Harrow.

      "I knew you were a Leo when I first saw you," Udele says. "I could see the lion in you. You have something fierce in you, something so aggressive. I could see that lion in your eyes. No woman can resist an animal like that. You are so brave that you just take what you want. When you see something that you want, you just grab it." Udele leans in closer to Mr. Harrow.

      He can resist no more. He grabs her and kisses her deeply and passionately.

      > x peephole
      Mr. Harrow is passionately kissing Udele. Udele stokes his fire, using her tongue to play cloyfully with his. She leans her bust against his chest, and he eagerly grabs her copious breast in his fist. He kneads it between his fingers.

      Udele's fingers wander between Mr. Harrow's legs. She gently probes his crotch, teasing him to hardness.

      > x peephole
      Udele tugs at Mr. Harrow's pants. He lifts his bum from the bed so that she can lower his trousers. His cock springs free, hard and erect.

      Udele coos in amazement, "that is a real lion's cock." She runs a finger up and down its length, and it throbs under her touch. "It's so beautiful," she says before gently kissing it again and again.

      Mr. Harrow groans in wide-eyed surprise by Udele's actions, but he is quickly quieted by the overwhelming sensation of her lips against his member.

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    2. > x peephole
      Udele gently laps at the head of Mr. Harrow's cock with her tongue, leaving him simmering in desire. She paces him, not wanting to come to a full boil just yet. She glances briefly at the peepholes while she licks.

      She takes one of Mr. Harrow's hands in hers and guides it between her legs. He squeezes her crotch as she continues tasting him.

      > x peephole
      Mr. Harrow's cock now glistens with Udele's saliva as she runs her tongue up and down its full length. She draws back and lies down on the bed, spreading her legs openly for him. Mr. Harrow advances between her legs, ready to skewer her.

      She grabs his arm. "Wait," she says. "Taste me first. My juices will whet your appetites."

      Mr. Harrow is confused, but Udele grabs his shirt collar and guides his face between her legs. He hesitantly dips his tongue into her snatch. He looks up to her for approval. She smiles and gives him a come hither look.

      > x peephole
      Mr. Harrow crawls up on top of Udele. She reaches down and grabs the base of his cock and guides it toward her passage. He grunts as he presses his hardness into her entrance.

      > x peephole
      Udele sighs as Mr. Harrow slowly slides his penis deeper inside her. She glides her nails along his buttocks. When her sheathe fully envelopes his sheathe, she begins to rock her hips, squeezing his member.

      > x peephole
      Mr. Harrow has never felt anything before like the sweetness of Udele's sex. He thrusts jerkily as Udele milks him with her undulating hips. She coos softly in his ear, "yes, my lion. Have me. Take me. Please."

      > x peephole
      Udele is breathing heavily. Her mouth forms a joyous smiling "O" as she lets the waves of pleasure lap at her body. Mr. Harrow cannot last long in such a strange and wonderful sex. Udele purrs softly in his ear, encouraging her lion to thrust hard and aggressively for his last few thrusts until he can hold himself back no longer. His cock is already quivering and spilling seed when he withdraws.

      > x peephole
      Udele and Mr. Harrow lay side-by-side in her bed, both satisfied by the earlier lovemaking.

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    3. Here are pieces of the main sex scene itself. I've written some quick text and combined it with bits and pieces of the public domain excerpts to get it done.

      Mrs. Harrow rigidly looks through a peephole, worriedly spying on her husband.

      > x peephole
      Udele is showing Mr. Harrow some nude sketches of her made by different visiting artists.

      "This sketch is so funny. I had to lie down with my legs open and bent in weird ways. It was very uncomfortable," Udele says.

      Mr. Harrow is stunned by the provocative pose.

      "I don't think the sketch looks like me at all. Lord Kettering says that I sometimes look that way. What do you think?"

      Mr. Harrow looks back and forth between the sketch and Udele, trying to imagine her without clothes and posed the same way. "It's hard to say."

      "You cannot tell with my skirt covering my legs." She draws her skirt up until it just barely covers her V. She then splays open her legs like in the sketch, revealing everything to Mr. Harrow. "Does it look the same now?"

      Mr. Harrow stares at her dumbfounded for several moments before coming to his senses and looking away. "It looks very similar."

      > lift skirt

      You grab Mrs. Harrow's skirt and slowly draw it up. You are thrilled when her creamy thighs come into view. You lift the skirt past her bare ass and bunch it up around her waist. Mrs. Harrow tries to ignore you as she watches her husband intently through the peephole but you can sense that she is very tense.

      > rub legs

      You gently run your fingers up and down Mrs. Harrow's bare legs as she stares through a peephole. Her skin is warm and soft to the touch. She holds her breath as your fingers glide over her naked buttocks. A slight shiver quickly runs through her body.

      > x peephole
      Udele is sitting on her bed with Mr. Harrow.

      "I knew you were a Leo when I first saw you," Udele says. "I could see the lion in you. You have something fierce in you, something so aggressive. I could see that lion in your eyes. No woman can resist an animal like that. You are so brave that you just take what you want. When you see something that you want, you just grab it." Udele leans in closer to Mr. Harrow.

      He can resist no more. He grabs her and kisses her deeply and passionately.

      > kiss Mrs. Harrow

      You gently plant a kiss on the back of her neck, swirling your tongue on her delicate skin. Your cradle your body around hers as you then trace a line of kisses from her neck to her cheek to her lips. Stunned by her husband's actions, she pliantly turns her head to accept your kiss, letting your tongue play with hers.

      > x peephole
      Udele tugs at Mr. Harrow's pants. He lifts his bum from the bed so that she can lower his trousers. His cock springs free, hard and erect.

      Udele coos in amazement, "that is a real lion's cock." She runs a finger up and down its length, and it throbs under her touch. "It's so beautiful," she says before gently kissing it again and again.

      Mr. Harrow groans in wide-eyed surprise by Udele's actions, but he is quickly quieted by the overwhelming sensation of her lips against his member.

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    4. > finger mouth

      You gently place a finger on Mrs. Harrow's moist lips, and she kisses it. You then slide it between her lips. She is confused and simply leaves her lips slightly parted as you start pumping your finger in and out of her mouth. You gently push on her chin until her mouth seals around your finger. Realizing what you are trying to do, she begins to suck on your finger as you penetrate her mouth with it.

      > rub pussy

      You slide a hand between Mrs. Harrow's thighs and tease at her slit. Playing with her lips, you find her clitoris and swirl your finger there gently. Though she continues to stare intently through the peephole, you can hear her breathing become heavier.

      > x peephole
      Mr. Harrow's cock now glistens with Udele's saliva as she runs her tongue up and down its full length. She draws back and lies down on the bed, spreading her legs openly for him. Mr. Harrow advances between her legs, ready to skewer her.

      She grabs his arm. "Wait," she says. "Taste me first. My juices will whet your appetites."

      Mr. Harrow is confused, but Udele grabs his shirt collar and guides his face between her legs. He hesitantly dips his tongue into her snatch. He looks up to her for approval. She smiles and gives him a come hither look.

      > lick pussy

      Kneeling between Mrs. Harrow's legs, you nudge your nose into her mossy depths and lick at her pussy. She inhales a sharp intake of breath in surprise. She has never felt someone's lips between her thighs before. You kiss her Mons Veneris a thousand times, and insert your tongue between the folding lips. You seek out her clitoris and played with it at will. Her hips jerk side to side under your onslaught and her breathing becomes labored and ragged.

      > x peephole
      Udele sighs as Mr. Harrow slowly slides his penis deeper inside her. She glides her nails along his buttocks. When her sheathe fully envelopes his sheathe, she begins to rock her hips, squeezing his member.

      > have sex with Mrs. Harrow

      You come up behind Mrs. Harrow and line up your cock between her legs. You can feel her moistness against its tip. Mrs. Harrow is swimming in a mix of emotions. She is devastated by her husband's infidelity, but your ministrations has caused her body to be flooded with arousal. You slide your penis up and down her channel, coating it with her juices. With each movement, you bump your hardness against her clitoris, sending a wave of pleasure through her body that obliterates all sense and reason from her mind.

      Her thighs open wide, leaving her sheath completely open to your conquest. You grab her hips and thrust upwards. Her lips part, and your head enters her secret cavern. Meeting little resistance, you push onward, filling her insides with your instrument.

      > have sex with Mrs. Harrow

      Your cock is fully engulfed by Mrs. Harrow's vagina. Her most secret and precious passageway is completely invaded and is now quietly sucking on your member. You draw back and start your delicious movements. Her body cannot resist its inherent nature and her hips start moving too, trying to swallow your prick deeper and deeper inside so that it can swallow your seed.

      Your thrust harder and more quickly. The ecstasy has completely overwhelmed Mrs. Harrow and she has abandoned any pretense of propriety. She ruts against you like a common animal. Her breasts bounce every which way as her body rocks and sways.

      > have sex with Mrs. Harrow

      You can feel the pressure building. Mrs. Harrow's sheath eagerly sucks at your manhood. You are amazed at how this thoughtful, intelligent woman is a pure maelstrom of desire when aroused. You can hold back no longer and thrust deeply into her. Your essence pours forth, filling her ravenous womb.

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    5. Only thing to watch for - this is an immersion-breaker: "Mr. Harrow has never felt anything before like the sweetness of Udele's sex." As a voyeur, there should not be this omniscience into the other character's head. "The way Mr. Harrow reacts to the sweetness of Udele's sex makes you guess he has never felt anything like it before..."

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    6. Only thing to watch for - this is an immersion-breaker: "Mr. Harrow has never felt anything before like the sweetness of Udele's sex." As a voyeur, there should not be this omniscience into the other character's head. "The way Mr. Harrow reacts to the sweetness of Udele's sex makes you guess he has never felt anything like it before..."

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    7. I was worried about that while writing it. I was being lazy and I was hoping I could keep the voyeur passages short by sneaking it in. Apparently not. Thank you for letting me know.

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    8. The cool advantage though, is you can write what your protagonist *sees*, and then also get the second level of how he *interprets* what he sees. The character's interpretation can be way different than reality.

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  2. These look good! The actions show the characterization well, especially with Udele. Her showing the sketches to Harrow was a nice touch. Also the bit about the zodiac signs was well done and believable.

    One thing (this may just be personal preference) I find when reading erotic literature is that a lot of times the characters aren't really described, physically. Maybe there'll be a reference to dark hair, or a curvy figure but for the most part the characters are just described as beautiful, or sexy, etc. Maybe it's just my hetero-dudeness coming through but I like to know what people look like visually, beyond just that they're good looking. Do they have any distinctive traits? Funny little dimples, a cleft on their chin, a notch in an eyebrow from an old scar, etc. Stuff like this can really bring a story to life in my opinion.

    That's definitely more of a general rant than a response to your post, and maybe those details would have come out previously in the story. I have a good idea of Udele and Harrow's personalities from this, but not so much of what they look like.

    As for my game, I haven't been able to work on it as much as I would have liked to lately due to outside circumstances. But, it's maybe 80% done and all that I have left to write is the sex scene more or less. So if I don't get any of that done for this section, I'll put it up in the next.

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    1. That's a good idea. I'll try to fill in extra details when I revise everything at the end.

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